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Post by smiley. on Sept 14, 2007 16:22:42 GMT -5
Like the title says, this is not a story. More, I need criticism for this story IDEA. Stormy said that she liked it, and she gave me some good ideas. But after we meditated in Theatre Arts today, I was suddenly filled with millions of new ideas, and next time I have writer's block I will know what to do!
But, Stormy and I agree. We are both ( mostly her, though (: ) honestly getting sick of stories being from the HERO'S point of view. Why not the villians?
Well, here's my story idea ( COPYRIGHT -shot ) This guy, unknown name so far, lives on a farm with his abusive father. His mother died of cancer when he was eleven, though he ( we'll call him JOE for now ) is fifteen now. A hurricane is blowing, and it is a 3.5 on the scale. His strict father forces him to go outside and herd all the animals together, so that they won't be damaged. As he's putting them in a safe shelter, Joe is struck by lightning. However, it was not enough to kill him. Joe is covered in injuries, terrible injuries and his father lies about how it happened. He blamed it on a car-wreck, highly unlike what really happened.
He starts noticing things. Weird things about himself, but he finally realizes what he is when he sees his mother's ghost eating dinner with them. He can see ghosts. He hates everything now, because they wouldn't let his mother pass on to heaven. Joe researches on the internet and finds out about this whole chat place with people who have the same ability as he does.
And then he notices her. Joe has decided to become a ghost hunter: to track all of them down and kill them the most brutal way possible. Joe notices a girl at his school that everyone can see, but she's paler and almost transparent - of course no one else notices this. Joe follows her around reluctantly, for this is a girl he hates. She annoys him and she's horrid, Joe wants to kill her. But then something interesting reaches his mind - She doesn't know she's a ghost. Joe starts figuring more and more about her, while continuing chatting in this chat area...place. Then one day this girl is missing. Joe immediately gets worried and finds out that one of his 'chat buddies' has decided to kill her. Joe doesn't go and try to save her because he likes her, it's because he wants to be the one to kill her.
But not yet, he wanted to wait a little while. So when he makes his way and reaches the place where she is, he finds out it was too late. She'd been killed, and he wasn't there in time.
Then the next book comes soon after, yada yada, where Joe is experiencing being with a group and such... I've got a lot of work to do, but does the IDEA sound okay?
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Post by Candy on Sept 14, 2007 19:12:08 GMT -5
The first one sounds like a really good idea.If you do write a book on it then I'll surely read it. [/size]
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Post by smiley. on Sept 14, 2007 19:16:09 GMT -5
The first one? Oh, I get it! And thankies (: I was gonna make it a love story, then I was like nuuu
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Post by | | Fudgey | | on Sept 15, 2007 1:45:32 GMT -5
It's a really good idea. *stern look* Get writing! xD
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Post by ask on Sept 15, 2007 5:00:54 GMT -5
This story is quite interesting =D I look forward to seeing it. Although I wonder how he can kill ghosts (Ghosts are supposed to be ethereal or something..) -shrug- But it's a story, look forward to seeing it. (Aslong as it doesn't feature a cliche fight scene) 'You can do better than that' 'Is that your best!? I honestly expected better' 'I could beat you with one.. no.. two... no, THREE hands tied behind my back!' Okay, fine, the third one I heard only once, in Star Wars Battlefront II by General Grievous, 'twas an awesome taunt anyway. xDD
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Post by | | Fudgey | | on Sept 15, 2007 8:57:35 GMT -5
xD Maybe he can kill ghosts with …a supa dagga! *stabs Frosty*
-kipper’d-
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Post by smiley. on Sept 15, 2007 12:30:07 GMT -5
That was one thing I was like: ohh, ghosts dying sounds kinda odd XP But, GOD, Frosty, you think I have not explanation for that?
By killing ghosts, it's ten time worse than dying or killing someone that's really alive. Normally spirits go to heaven or hell, and many people on earth still remember that person...but if something goes wrong or something when you die, you don't go to either. It's terrible, living the life of ghost ( as Joe finds out ) And to kill a ghost you have to kill their carcass. You know, wherever their buried or something... And for another explanation, if you are cremated you dont become a ghost. But yeah, you destroy their carcass and then every trace that that ghost every existed disappears. no one remembers them, nothing, nada. It's really kind of cruel, actually...
And eww, no. No fights like that (: More like this: YOU SUCK! Jk =D
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Post by ask on Sept 15, 2007 15:21:26 GMT -5
You should of just said 'That it rolls like how it rolls down at da Supernatural tv showz' /: But I still say shooting ghosts with rock salt loaded in a shotgun is much, much cooler.
HEYHEYHEY. Could you make him try to kill a victim of the Titanic? =DD (Nuu, don't say they were on the ship, say they were a stowaway or something)
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Post by smiley. on Sept 15, 2007 15:25:36 GMT -5
O.O ...?
I think the girl's name will be Alison, it just clicks for me. The guy'll be something like Ryan...
The bad guy that tries to kill Alison? His name will either be Frost or Ask, 'cause he doesn't reveal his real name.
Not.kidding.
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Post by ask on Sept 15, 2007 15:58:48 GMT -5
O.O ...?
I think the girl's name will be Alison, it just clicks for me. The guy'll be something like Ryan...
The bad guy that tries to kill Alison? His name will either be Frost or Ask, 'cause he doesn't reveal his real name.
Not.kidding. --------- Lulz. =D I DEMAND ROYALTIES OR I'LL SUE. And what I mean is, her/his body would have probably disappeared/got eaten by fishies and is obviously deep under the sea. So it's kinda obvious what the theme is. Someone he can't kill. -shotzorz-
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Post by smiley. on Sept 15, 2007 16:03:44 GMT -5
Frosty's got brains. Let the lord rejoice. But the other dude knows another way to exterminate them. With a net... a mirorr... and a shotgun (:
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Post by ask on Sept 15, 2007 18:29:18 GMT -5
Lulzorz. xD
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Post by | | Fudgey | | on Sept 16, 2007 0:57:34 GMT -5
xD It is such a good idea Smiley - *wants to write it* I luff the idea of the chat-room thing - maybe that could be where they meet Ask.
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Post by smiley. on Sept 16, 2007 10:00:20 GMT -5
And Fudgey doesn't have brains. Let the lord fall in sadness. IDIOT, YES THAT IS WHERE HE MEETS ASK!
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Post by smiley. on Sept 16, 2007 10:01:40 GMT -5
Now, I can't decide whether or not it should be FIRST PERSON or Third person limited... Help? As soon as I've got an answer, I'll start writing.
I mean, with first person it seems so much more personal. But with Third person, it seems confusing at times...
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